tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5666068754862521381.post1544582972948027571..comments2007-10-04T19:29:32.774-07:00qnoreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5666068754862521381.post-42957166271965906272007-10-04T19:29:00.000-07:002007-10-04T19:29:00.000-07:00Comments and Feedback<BR/><BR/>Theory<BR/><BR/>It might have been useful to refer to relevant psychological theory when discussing the social psychology studies and the findings and implications arising from each study. You needed to spend more time discussing the implications arising from the findings obtained in each study. You also needed to outline a rationale for the order in which you ranked the studies, as this was not very clear in your blog discussion; for example, you needed to outline the specific parameters and factors that you considered when ranking the studies. It was good that you attempted to apply the Princeton Trilogy Study to aspects of your own life.<BR/><BR/>Research<BR/><BR/>You may have described the methodology of the Stanford Prison Study and Milgram's Obedience to Authority Study in too much detail.<BR/><BR/>Written Communication<BR/><BR/>A number of grammatical and punctuation errors were present in the blog discussion. The introduction could have been worded more succinctly; you also needed to provide a clearer outline for the blog discussion in the introduction. The second paragraph ("Why experiment?") did not seem directly relevant to the blog topic and probably could have been omitted. Your blog discussion needed a conclusion to briefly summarise the key points and concepts discussed in the blog. No in-text references were present in the blog and references in the reference list were not correctly presented, according to APA (5th ed.) format; electronic and internet sources should also contain the date and month they were retrieved - refer to the Smyth (2004) or Burton (2002) book for correct APA (5th ed.) referencing requirements. You seem to have relied predominantly on internet-based sources.<BR/><BR/>On-line Engagement<BR/><BR/>You needed to include a self-evaluation against each of the four marking criteria as an appendix. More on-line engagement is required. One thing you could do to increase your on-line engagement is to post messages on your blog site that involve situations from your own daily life or other peoples' daily lives (e.g., friends and acquaintances) that reflect examples of the key concepts and psychological theories covered in the unit syllabus.Alexhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11706159228916029898noreply@blogger.com